Revisions- added foreshadowing when she choses her bow scene 3, foreshadowing that there is still another invader scene 5, added foreshadowing romance scene 8.
You had told me in our last revision session to have the stranger give her something more subtle than a piece of paper with instructions on it. I decided to go with the invaders language which will be used later on. Revision scene 10, 13, & 14.
One of the other bigger revisions you had prompted me with was to provide conflict for the trader after he betrays his own clan to help the colonies. I added that his own clan disowns him and banishes him for life allowing him to never see his children again. Scene 15.
Here is the final link- https://express.adobe.com/page/Ov6VrFKMbHXlD/